Lizzy’s Birthday One day Lizzy the little girl. Her mum wanted to do a birthday for her but she did not want to have a birthday because the other kids will get jealous because they did not have a birthday cause there mum and dads were busy.
Kia Ora Violet, This is Joannie, I like how you made story clear. Also I like how you made the picture look cool. But maybe next time make it more clear that it was an edited photo, at first I thought you just showed a photo and described it. Maybe you could check out my blog? Have a nice day!
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Kia Ora Violet, This is Joannie, I like how you made story clear. Also I like how you made the picture look cool. But maybe next time make it more clear that it was an edited photo, at first I thought you just showed a photo and described it. Maybe you could check out my blog? Have a nice day!
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